Cambridge IELTS 11 (Test-3) - Writing task 2
Write about following topic:
Some people say that only reason for learning a foreign language is in
order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are
not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Many of the people, and I also agree that a foreign language is not only for
traveling or working purpose. A foreign language also vast our knowledge of
that particular country and culture. Therefore, a foreign language is must
necessary for gaming knowledge, not also for traveling and working.
Nowadays, or society going limitless. Adults are not only going for earning
money, they also want reputation. Companies are want not only a multi-talent
employee, they also hiring who are know there mother tongue. A person who
are skilled in multi language, he will get more value in from other employees.
As an example I worked in an international project where lots of foreigner
works and I saw who are know foreign language he could interact with foreign
employee and got more recognition.
However, as I thought, a foreign language is not only for traveling and working.
It will level up ours knowledge and cultural value of a country. Because a
language is the fundamental step to knowing a country. If we know foreign
language we can do more interaction with people and know their cultural
value and tradition. The more we learn a foreign language, the more we know
about world and culture.
In conclusion, I believe that learning a foreign language is not only for actual
needs like work or travel. It will help our moral ethics and ideas. A person who
are curious for knowledge he could investigate and study a foreign language .
OpenAI feedback:
Based on the provided essay, here's an assessment of the overall band score:
Task Response (6.0): The essay addresses the topic by discussing the
importance of learning a foreign language beyond just traveling or working
purposes. You provide examples and personal experiences to support your
argument. However, some points could be elaborated further, and the essay
lacks depth in discussing potential challenges or counterarguments.
Coherence and Cohesion (6.5): The essay is generally well-organized, with
clear paragraphing and a logical flow of ideas. Transitions between sentences
and paragraphs are mostly smooth, although there are a few instances where
clarity could be improved. Some repetition of phrases and ideas could also be
reduced for better cohesion.
Lexical Resource (6.0): Your use of vocabulary is adequate, and you
demonstrate a basic range of words and phrases. However, there is some
repetition of vocabulary ("traveling or working purpose," "foreign language"),
and the essay lacks variety and sophistication in language use. Adding more
diverse and precise vocabulary could enhance the overall quality of your
writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy (6.0): Your grammar is generally accurate,
with a variety of sentence structures used effectively. However, there are
several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings throughout the essay that
affect clarity and coherence. Paying closer attention to sentence structure and
grammar could improve the overall fluency of your writing.
Overall, your essay demonstrates a basic understanding of the topic and
presents a coherent argument, but there is room for improvement in
language use, coherence, and grammatical accuracy.
Overall Band Score: 6.0.
Many may say, and I agree, that today’s society has almost erased all its borders and
soon will become limitless in what concerns travelling for both work and pleasure.
Therefore, if this is to happen, then learning a new language is necessary.
Nowadays, learning a new language for the purpose of working in other countries
seems to become more and more popular. Adults in need of money or, why not,
recognition are trying to pursue their happiness for away from home. Also, the hey
days of employers looking only for capable people have gone. It seems that today’s
employers are looking not only for multi-skilled employees, but they also want
people who know more than their mother tongue. Sooner or later, those who
omitted learning more are prone to become jobless.
However, to my mind, a new language shouldn’t be learned just for travelling or
working in a foreign country. A foreign language should help the leaner broaden his
mind. By this I mean that the new language should and will allow us to understand
more about the world itself, and maybe our ancestors’ ways of thinking and acting.
Needless to say, knowing another language will help us when it comes to
understanding the human race, because language is the first poem of a country.
All of this being said, I believe that learning a different language should be not only
for satisfying our physical needs, like money, but also our moral needs, because
never before had such a big thirst for knowledge been displayed.
