THE DEVELOPMENT OF A

PARAGRAPH

GROUP 4

o Sausan Sarifah
o Irma Nur Azizah
o Novia Jayanti
o Indah Ismayanti
o Nur Albaniah
 Paragraph Development
• After you’ve chosen a topic sentence, you develop
your main idea by adding more information to
explain what you mean.

• There are three common ways to develop a

paragraph
1. Giving Details
2. Giving Explanation
3. Giving Example
D ETAILS

Details are specific points that

tell more about a general
statement
 Atlas Health Center
You’ll love working out at the Atlas Health Center, and you’ll love what
it does for you!! We have state-of-the-art exercise equipment in large,
air conditioned rooms. You can work out alone or with the help of one
of our professional personal trainers. If you like to exercise with friends,
join an aerobics or swimming class – or even try kickboxing! Our staff
nutrition experts are always on hand to talk with you about health
issues. When you’re finished, you can relax with a whirlpool bath or
sauna. Come exercise with us at Atlas, and you’ll soon be feeling strong
and looking good.
You’ll love working out at the Atlas Health Center, and you’ll love what
it does for you!! We have state-of-the-art exercise equipment in large,
air conditioned rooms. You can work out alone or with the help of one
of our professional personal trainers. If you like to exercise with friends,
join an aerobics or swimming class – or even try kickboxing! Our staff
nutrition experts are always on hand to talk with you about health
issues. When you’re finished, you can relax with a whirlpool bath or
sauna. Come exercise with us at Atlas, and you’ll soon be feeling strong
and looking good.
EXPLA NATION

An explanation tells what

something means or how
something works.
“A stitch in time saves nine”
My mother, who likes to sew, used this simple saying to
teach me the value of working on problems when they
are still small. Originally, the saying referred to sewing
– if you have a small hole in a shirt, you can repair it
with one stitch. But if you wait, the hole will get larger,
and it will take you nine stitches. This simple sentence
reminds me to take care of small problems before they
become big problems.
“A stitch in time saves nine”
My mother, who likes to sew, used this simple saying to
teach me the value of working on problems when they
are still small. Originally, the saying referred to sewing
– if you have a small hole in a shirt, you can repair it
with one stitch. But if you wait, the hole will get larger,
and it will take you nine stitches. This simple sentence
reminds me to take care of small problems before they
become big problems.
 EXAMP LE

An example is a specific person, place,

thing, or event that supports an idea of
statement.

Notice the signal phrases that can

introduce examples. At the beginning of a
sentence, use “for example” or “for
instance”, followed by a comma.
Even when a first date is a disaster, a couple can still become good friends. For
example, my first date with Greg was terrible. I thought he was coming to pick
me up at 6:30, but instead he came at 6:00. I didn’t have time to fix my hair,
and my make up looked sloppy. When I got into his car, I scrapped my leg
against the car and tore my stocking. Next, he took me to an Italian restaurant
for dinner, and I accidentally dropped some spaghetti on my shirt. Then we
went to a movie. Greg asked me which movie I wanted to see, and I chose a
romantic comedy. He fell asleep during the movie and I got angry. Now that
Greg and I are good friends, we can look back and laugh at how terrible that
the first date was!
Even when a first date is a disaster, a couple can still become good friends. For
example, my first date with Greg was terrible. I thought he was coming to pick
me up at 6:30, but instead he came at 6:00. I didn’t have time to fix my hair,
and my make up looked sloppy. When I got into his car, I scrapped my leg
against the car and tore my stocking. Next, he took me to an Italian restaurant
for dinner, and I accidentally dropped some spaghetti on my shirt. Then we
went to a movie. Greg asked me which movie I wanted to see, and I chose a
romantic comedy. He fell asleep during the movie and I got angry. Now that
Greg and I are good friends, we can look back and laugh at how terrible that
the first date was!
 Concluding Sentences
How to end a paragraph

o The final sentence of a paragraph is called the concluding sentence

o It sums up the main points or restates the main idea in a different way.

o A sentence that sums up the paragraph reminds the reader of what the
writer’s main idea and supporting points were.

o A sentence that restates the main idea should give the same information
in a slightly different way, perhaps by using different words or by using
different words order

o A concluding sentence should NOT introduce a new point.

I will never eat dinner at The Little French
Bistro again. The restaurant is not very
clean. You can see dust in the corners and
the shelves. The food is expensive but the
portions are small. I never feel full after I’ve
finished eating. In addition, the waiters are
not very friendly. For these reasons, I will
not visit that restaurant again.
 Peer Editing
• Showing your work to another student is a
very useful way to improve your writing.
• This is called peer editing.
• You read your partner’s writing and your
partner reads yours.
• You might talk together, write comments
on a sheet or write directly on the sheet.
 Why do writers use peer editing?
• To get a reader’s opinion about • Another reason to share
your writing. A reader can tell writing with others is for
you that you to read more examples
of writing
– You should add more details • Other people will have had
or explanation experiences that you
– Something is not organized haven’t
clearly • They may show you fresh
– You have some information ways of writing about
that is not relevant experiences
– There is something that is • Reading their paragraph
hard to understand can give you good ideas to
use yourself in the future
 How do I peer edit?
• Read your partner’s paper several times. The first time, just
read from the beginning through to the end. Ask yourself,
“what is it about? What is the writer’s purpose?”

• On your second reading, go more slowly and look at the

specific parts of the writing and make notes.
– Look for the topic sentences and concluding sentences
– Note places where you have trouble misunderstanding something,
where there seems to be unnecessary information, or where there
is not enough information.
– Let the writer know which part of the paper are especially strong
or interesting.
– Ask questions.
– Circle or underline the words, phrases, and sentences that you
wish to comment on.
– Don’t look for grammar or spelling mistakes. Pay attention just to
the content and organization of the paper.
 Terima Kasih

Thank you
Arigatou

Merci Syukron