hmm to be fair since everything domo is saying is from mimi's thoughts i guess that's a window in? i think the point is also that mimi should present as narcissistic (but you don't realize that until later) and basically says whatever she thinks. i sometimes like wondering what a character's thinking instead of knowing it, but i also find writing internal character struggle tougher since what i write feels more cringe to me sometimes :P
and yeah, the whole story & writing (6000+ words) was done in 72 hours, mostly by nii (who did all the art except minigame stuff) and myself (who did the rest of the art + almost all the programming) so :') many places we could've refined but i think it was pretty good for the time limit. lots of kudos to you though, i tend to lose motivation for longer projects haha